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Familiar tear by ~LadyXela:iconLadyXela:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


The darkness kept behind the eyes
The pain hidden by the synthetic smile
The truth changed so many times
The attention craved is not deserved
Not worthy of the love she’s given
No emotions are clear
Her feelings uncertain
All her happiness fleeing
What was there now is gone
The familiar tear runs down her face and falls upon the cold, hard floor.
She hates herself and this life
To afraid to pick up the blade
The liquid paralyser runs down her throat
Not sure if she feels better or worse
Waiting for someone to help
To get her away from herself
To make a new

That person never came.
©2005-2010 ~LadyXela
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Author's Comments

This was written for my English class and I’m pretty proud of it because it got me an A! This is an unconventionally dark poem for someone like me, but anyway, tell me what you think. :D

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~Mitchellw Aug 26, 2005, 2:09:15 AM
yes, I quite enjoy this piece. Even through its proofing stages I noticed as to how good it is.

what gets me the most it that the story is built up and then left at the end with uncertianty. I find this to be a saddening ending.
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~LadyXela Aug 26, 2005, 6:03:00 AM
thanks champ

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~HungryEyes2708 Aug 26, 2005, 9:00:41 PM
Thats really awesome! I like the ending... Great job!

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"It is our ability to do stupid illogical things that makes us human."
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~eternal-meatball Aug 26, 2005, 9:36:08 PM
I'm here for you if you want to talk. or if you just need a sholder to cry on.
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~LadyXela Aug 26, 2005, 10:39:39 PM
thankyou so much!

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~LadyXela Aug 26, 2005, 10:40:41 PM
haha thanks but i'll be alright.

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~LadyXela Aug 26, 2005, 11:36:53 PM
ummmm alright then

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~the-DeCoDeR Aug 28, 2005, 1:36:28 AM
i wrote a poem in reply to this poem... i hope you can see

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